My rating: 3 of 5 stars
The concept felt fresh and the plot, while slow at the start, picked up about half way through and finished rather quickly but left the reader hanging. I found it difficult to get a unique feel for each of the characters as the writing style and way of speaking never changed between them. While I did enjoy the idea, I was not fond of the over usage of commas and other grammatical errors.
With a few good edits to fix the flow, mistakes, misspellings (and other issues) this has the potential to be a really good read.